I find the dark frightening. Sky of coal black and winds of frosty furry. My heart races like a dog pulling a snow sled. I have one goal, one lone mindset. CANDY!!!!!
With my spiderman costume. I could last as long as my legs could take, and that was hours. The cold was no match for the warmth of my identity sealing mask. the mask was like fire ontop of water. Both the heat and the cold was felt.
By my first, tenth house, I hadn't lost a step. My long buff physique, complemented by the red and blue, suite I wore, made beating the other kids to the candy, every so easy.
Running to each house forcing my way to the front before the door opened, announcing my victories of number one. "I beat ya'll, HA!!!" My glory dances lasted all the way to the next house, where I would continue my plight of domination.
I know you hated it, but your piece was decent. You used very strong vocabulary. One thing you could work on is showing what your 'glory dance' is. Or showing what the reaction was when you said 'I beat y'all'.
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